Greetings to you, Robert Hayes! I promise that I am the true, the original, the one and only Write_Mikey_Write!, and not some imposter appearing by virtue of Polyjuice Potion (may I be thrown into the deepest dungeon of Azkaban, if I am lying). This review is part of my participation as a member of Slytherin House in Round Three at Harry Potter and the Writers' Spell {item:2228853}. This review is only intended to let you know I read your poem and to give you an idea of what I liked, what I thought needed improvement, and my overall view of your poem. The comments are just my opinion, so you are free to accept, modify or discard them as you deem fit. My review is intended to be encouraging and helpful; nothing is intended to be hurtful in any way.

Visual setup. You lead off with underlined boldness - nice. I like the way the lines weave in and out, none overlong or too short, flowing from beginning to end.

Clarity. Your narrative flowed naturally from beginning to end, and you did a great job following the rhyme scheme. You also did a good job with the meter, something that can be hard to do.

What caught my eye / attention? Your heroine reminds me a bit of the Sorceress in The Scorpion King. She, too, was trapped by her gift.

What did I like best? I like that, at the end, she was able to pursue her own life and was no longer in bondage to the king.

What would I change? I would edit the item's title to match the title in the text (I've had to do this more than once in my own writing). The following suggestions are aimed at aiding the meter in a few places. I would a) remove the "to" in Line 4, b) use the contraction "she'll" in Line 8, c) use "'mongst" in Line 13, d) change "there" to "their" in Line 16, e) maybe use "In the village you'll find a home" in Line 32, and f) use the contraction "you're" in the last line. Again - you needn't adopt any of these suggestions. I know you worked hard to make this flow, and I think these changes could help with that.

Summing up. This is a nice poem that tells the story of a priestess - an oracle - and how she goes from being held captive to being in control of her own life.

Enjoy the rest of your day and...WRITE ON!