It is my pleasure to read your poem, This Tainted Love, and give you a review. Schnujo's next semester starts bid on my package at "Invalid Item"  where I listed three poem reviews and five story reviews. She wants me to gift these reviews to a newbie. You’re my first.

Message/Theme: When romances die, hearts are broken. Most of us go through this, and it's not fun. You feel inferior, you wonder how this could be over, it all was so beautiful. When there are two people, and the other feeling are not the same, this is hard to get over. Your poem was beautifully written, showing the pain by writing what it was like to love so freely, only to be ripped apart by brutal honesty.

Theme: Romance turns into heartbreak.

Narrative/Style: The narrative is well done, you showed how love can fall apart. Sometimes is just main cruelty by the other, which makes it even harder to get over. Love can turn into hate, unfortunately.

Form/Flow/Tone/Mood: The form seems free form, writing from the heart.

The flow shows scene by scene of pain. Some people can be so cruel!

The tone is sad.

The mood is bitter, angry, feeling defeated.

Imagery/Pace: The imagery "Ripping out my heart," & "Thristy for blood, you take and take."

FAVORITE LINE:

My heart ripped from my chest
Is still bleeding at the top
Of this stone temple.
Does this please you?
Can I finally be released of
This tainted love

OPINION: These choice of words show me the pain that this love affair cost you. I hope all is okay now.



Thank you for sharing your work with us!
Jeannie🌺



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