Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them!
Overall Impression: A great use of the prompt! Poor John, that's a long time to be alone!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:
1. In this section - the cultures they base had in stock - you may want to change "they" to "the".
Readability: A great first draft, an easy and enjoyable read.
Suggestions: My only suggestion would be to find one or two synonyms for "hallucination" so that "hallucination" isn't so repetitive throughout the story.
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