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 | Unlikely Friend  [E] Unexpected friendship that you now can't live without  |
| (4.5)| Hallo! This one showed up on Random Reads. I really like this simple, free verse poem about how a friendship grew and what it means to you now. I think many of your readers will be able to relate to it, too. I usually don't ask poets to change punctuation, since they've expressed themselves in their style -- but here, I'd say please put a full-stop after 'no use', otherwise it runs into the next line and becomes confusing. I'm also guessing the 'club' came a few years later. Maybe a one-line space between, to show the passage of time? The poem works well as is, I just think these tweaks would enhance it. Maybe you'd also like to try using some WritingML like font and center. Thanks for sharing this! Write On!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 08/17/2021 @ 1:34am EDT