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Review #4615360
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 Friends Open in new Window. [E]
Flash Fiction
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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It's a good piece of flash fiction. Since you've titled it 'Friends', one naturally assumes that that is whom you are speaking to, and it unfolds as a surprise who it really is and why you chose this title.

You bring out the dynamics of a family really well without resorting to 'telling'. Also, how one incident can change the existing equations between family members who actually realize how much they mean to each other.

I have no suggestions for the story itself, it works fine as it is. I'd only say use the brief description and genres more to your advantage to get this piece a wider audience, and maybe some WritingML like font, size and line spacing for readability.

Thanks for sharing this one!

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