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My goodness!
What a bleak picture you paint of corporate life! And yet, unfortunately, it's true for so many people. I'm not sure which country you're in, but here in India, I can totally relate. While some of it brings a knowing smile, some parts bring sadness -- and the bit about the family (kids and parents) is quite chilling.

The title, brief description, cover picture and genres all work for your piece. The layout is good, but I would suggest a line-space for a new paragraph.

The piece was very intense. I guess this echoes the feeling of a day in the office. However, I was wondering -- at least during the tea-breaks, if you could also give the reder a break? Include some small-talk dialogue that might be exchanged, or a text or two that might be sent?

I found no technical or grammatical errors.

Thanks for sharing this piece, it made me happy to have left the corporate world in 1995!

Write On! Dream On!



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