The imagery is very vivid and the words chosen evoke a mood. The verse structure works, even with some lines being lengthy.
I'm quite intrigued about who the character is. This is left to interpretation on purpose, I'm guessing. I'm not sure if I'm missing something or if you have given a clue as to who it is. If you haven't, maybe a hint in the brief description or one of the lines would help.
In the last two lines, you've repeated the word 'out' - would you like to change one of those? Also, you haven't picked any 'genres', you could do that, too.
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