The Frightful Little Dragon [ASR] A brief account of a small creature with lasting impressions. |
Greetings from "The WDC Angel Army" Hallo! I saw your portfolio featured on "Anniversary Reviews" . The title and brief description attracted my attention when I got to your poetry folder. This is a cute poem about a little dragon. I enjoyed the descriptions! I also like the other feature you bring out -- the loneliness. This makes it seem real. I must admit that at my first reading I kept looking for a 'twist'. I kept thinking it would be something else described as a 'dragon'. Once I knew what the poem was, I had to read the whole thing again to fully appreciate it without that anticipation! In a couple of places I found the rhyme a bit forced, maybe you'd like to read it again for flow. In the line on 'Eating', you may want to delete the word 'is'. And when you say 'parish' -- do you mean 'perish'? Would you like to try WritingML like font, size, center and color, to enhance the impact? Thanks for sharing this delightful piece! Happy WdC Anniversary! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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