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The Frightful Little Dragon Open in new Window. [ASR]
A brief account of a small creature with lasting impressions.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hallo!
I saw your portfolio featured on "Anniversary ReviewsOpen in new Window..

The title and brief description attracted my attention when I got to your poetry folder.

This is a cute poem about a little dragon. I enjoyed the descriptions! I also like the other feature you bring out -- the loneliness. This makes it seem real.

I must admit that at my first reading I kept looking for a 'twist'. I kept thinking it would be something else described as a 'dragon'. Once I knew what the poem was, I had to read the whole thing again to fully appreciate it without that anticipation!

In a couple of places I found the rhyme a bit forced, maybe you'd like to read it again for flow.
In the line on 'Eating', you may want to delete the word 'is'.
And when you say 'parish' -- do you mean 'perish'?

Would you like to try WritingML like font, size, center and color, to enhance the impact?

Thanks for sharing this delightful piece!
Happy WdC Anniversary!


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