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Hallo!
I came to your portfolio because it's your anniversary-month on WdC.

I enjoyed reading the back-and-forth dialogue. The ending made me smile.

My suggestions:
In some places, the dialogue didn't sound natural. It seems you, as the writer, wanted to tell the reader something and put it in as dialogue instead of narration. Maybe you could read the piece aloud and tweak it to combine narration and dialogue ...?

The formatting sometimes confused me about who is speaking. Maybe clearer line-spacing between one speaker and the other.

I'm glad they're finally doing something for themselves! *Smile*

Write On!

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