Hallo! This one showed up on Random Reads. This is an interesting concept you have here. Since these are random musings, you haven't arranged them into a flow of thought, but if you expand this piece you have some good stuff -- a seed and a star, how it is both. I would suggest to you to make this into an essay or a story incorporating these ideas. Either just the 'seed' concept, or just the 'star' concept or 'both combined' concept, all of them work. Currently, I'd say use some WritingML like font, size and line-spacing for greater readability. Write on! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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