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The Simple Things In Life Open in new Window. [E]
The joy of being alive in nature.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This first person narrative short story was a surprising read. At first, I thought this was a person. About a third in, when there was mention of nostrils and sniffing, I started thinking this wasn't a person after all.

I'm letting you know of these typos because those are the things that I overlook in my own writing and it helps me when someone who sees them says something.

*Bullet* the warmth of the sun which gently shown [shone is the past tense of shine] upon my back
*Bullet* who had been here before me. [capital F] following the scent
*Bullet* felt the fuzziness of it. [capital I] it clung to the tree like a baby clings to its' [no apostrophe here - its is the correct possessive word] mother.
*Bullet* see the top of this giant towering over all other solders [soldiers?]

Lovely revelation at the end which animal is telling the story. There were many hints throughout, but I also thought it could be a squirrel. Very sweet and fun story. Good nature descriptions using all of the senses.

Annette
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