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 Abnormalities Open in new Window. [E]
A brief message on trying to love and understand each other.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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A short poem with a very powerful message. Explores the idea of travel and learning about different cultures.

The title, brief description and genres work. Maybe you'd like to add a cover photo. The poem is short, but has a rhythm and rhyme scheme which help convey the message.

Are you going to expand on this poem? There is scope for making it longer.

If not, I'd suggest you take a look at the last line.
When you say 'learn people's abnormalities' it might be interpreted as something derogatory. Like you're trying to pry into something unnatural. Maybe 'Understand' or 'Empathize with' might work better. This is just my personal view, though!

Thanks for this little fist that packed a hard punch!

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