Hi Shaye,
As you know we are on a mission from Stargate and your portfolio popped up on my radar. I like how you just drop into the thick of it without setting up the scene with a lot of description. It is tense, fast-paced, and cold. I also like how the dialog is brisk and brief and really, they don't speak a lot but communicate so much more than they verbalize. Makes me want to read more and see what happens next!