Hello, I'm am reviewing "Invalid Item"  for the Space Blog group:

Using all capital letters to write something, and without exclamation marks, speak to me on various levels and make me want to understand the choice. It is often meant to be loud and aggressive, and I could not decipher the reason other than just the riders preference. I would recommend not using all caps, and to let the power of the words do the heavy lifting, as I see this as a distraction.

From a psychological viewpoint, using all caps tells me more about the writer, then what is actually found the actual message. The words themselves are structured in the manner of senses, in this case three... see, hear, feel. They are offered up as examples of how the writer is using their organs to comprehend why their communication with this person they desire has not reached a full understanding. That is until this person uses the sense of feeling, someone expressively, obviously.

It could be that the writer has applied their own fiction to understanding the other person in the short poem that attempts to demonstrate that on the surface people can be confusing and hard to understand until we connect with them on an emotional level. And while the poem does not demonstrate how this process ended up succeeding it does arrive at a conclusion that is life-changing for the narrator, which claims that they will except the other on their own terms.

To me that says I am giving you your space. I think that the narrator does acquiesce, but without acknowledging that there is a chance that their relationship might not be repairable because of the inability to understand one another. That's what I got from a psychological standpoint.

I've touched on some of the structure of this poem and see its mechanisms at work, making it through poetry. I would suggest using more poetic devices to give the reader more to go on. The poem basically is mostly about feeling and could use The writers other senses to describe a situation and to make a connection to the emotions related to these words depicted.

It was a pleasure to consider this poem of deep meaning and gave me much to think about. I would also suggest googling ways to use all caps, in poetry and the power it lends.

Brian




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .