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Hello proton69 Author Icon,

I am reviewing this story/poem for the following contest:
"Rising to the Challenge! - CLOSED"  Open in new Window. by Lilli 🧿 ☕ Author Icon

Prompt: Start your poem with this phrase: "It begins..."
Line Count: minimum 12 lines

*Type* This review has no bearing on the outcome of the contest. Reviewing the entries gives me the opportunity to take a closer look.

*Flowerb* Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

I really like the first sentence of your poem! You made good use of the prompt phrase.

Your poem has an optimistic theme and I like the destiny aspect of it.

*Flowerb* Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:

Where is played it's symphony?
This should read 'its symphony', not it's.
It's is the contraction for 'it is'.

I hope and frustrate everyday-
The way the word is being used here, it should be every day, not everyday.

*Bulletg* Everyday, one word, is an adjective meaning "used or seen daily," or "ordinary."

*Bulletg* Every day, two words, is an adverb phrase meaning "daily" or "every weekday."

*Flowerb* Closing Comments:

Thank you for your entry and keep writing!



Thank you for sharing your work.


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