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| 02.01.22   Review: "Invalid Item"  written by marymusesPoems speak to different readers in different ways. I’d like to share my impressions of this poem with you. First: I was curious about the title of the poem and was compelled to read on to see what it meant. As I Read: * Paragraph 1: I was hooked by the first two lines -- It begins … or so it would seem, / Somewhere between reality and dream. There was something inviting about being pulled into the ether between reality and a dream. * Paragraph 2: Effective use of questions and then mention of a curse. The tension was building. * Paragraph 3: Effective use of alliteration – prophetic powers * Paragraphs 4 & 5: These paragraphs indicated that she didn’t want to be the holder of such powers and went to sleep. Surprisingly, when she awoke, there seemed within her a feeling of acceptance that she would become a seer into the unknown. This was a meaningful line – Her powers grew, as did her grace. Nice use of personification in this line - Cradled gently in sleep’s embrace, Suggestions: The poem had a pretty consistent rhythm until the last line of Stanza 4. If this were my poem, I would try to revise that line so that it is in closer alignment with the poem’s rhythm. Finally: This is a very entertaining poem due, in part, to its subject matter, word choices, and emotional description and imagery. I was swept along with its rhyme and rhythm. I also enjoyed taking the journey with her through all the emotions while she considered her destiny as a seer. Thank you for sharing!
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