A Gal From Encino [13+] National Cappuccino Day! |
Hello Richard ~ Thankful!! ! Your poem was featured in this weekend's WDC SuperPower Reviwer's May Review Raid and I loved it so thought you deserved a nice review. INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW: You wrote a funny limerick poem that made me laugh out loud. You kept me riveted throughout and made me read straight through to the end. MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK: Your poem was a great tribute to National Cappuccino day and I hope it won the contest. This was a fun and lighthearted poem that was enjoyable for me to read. Your poem is well written, flows nicely and, I think, will be highly enjoyable to anyone with a sense of humor. My favorite line was the last because it made me laugh. I liked how you structured your poem. I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your poem. The genres and photo that you selected are perfect for your poem. In the spirit of helpfulness, I have a totally optional (and opinionated vs based on any true grammar or poetry rule) suggestion. I'd personally recommend changing "was craving" in the second line to "craved" though it might screw up the syllable count. There are a few schools of thought on limerick line counts and it'd be fine in the more generous one, I think. CONCLUSION: You wrote a fun holiday poem that I enjoyed reading. Well done! Thank you for sharing your humor and poetry with the writing.com community! May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance! PWheeler *** WDC SuperPower Raid Review *** Poetry Garden Review Mega Review Challenge Review My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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