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 |  | Graveyard Cough  [E] Working for a living should not take your life.  |
| (5.0)  Greetings Redtowrite. I am happy to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" .  Wow! This poem captures the plight of the coal miner vividly. I am familiar with the history of coal mining and it was a terribly hard life and often did involve whole families as they had no other option in these coal towns.  The title is so evocative and evokes curiousity. The symbolism is perfect. The voice of the younger man is clear as you have him dream of a change so he will not have to share his father's fate. The use of the concept of a "mirror" struck home! I like that it gave him the idea of a new vision. The idea of sacrificing his miner's hat and running is potent. The imagery of the "furnace", "belly", "the curse" are potent and the description of the effects on the coal miner was effective. I feel bad for him and his family having to notice it too. The last line is so imperative and a positive way to complete the vision. It gives hope. I enjoyed reading it a loud with its strong tone and effective soundscape as you made good use of poetic tools. The dark font accents the theme well. I thought of the song "The Working Man" by Rita MacNeil.Thanks for writing this tribute to these coal miners. What a horrendous job!
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You responded to this review 06/01/2022 @ 1:28pm EDT