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 Irrefutable Whispers  [ASR]
Because of God’s undeniable faithfulness, it’s never too late to run back to Him. 🤍
by DestinyAwaitsDarling
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hallo!
I was looking for a newbie to review for an event, and I found this poem on the list. The title, brief description and first two genres work. I'm wondering about 'Writing' as the third genre - maybe 'Experience' or 'Emotional' would fit better.

The poem encourages the person being addressed - 'you' - to accept forgiveness and give up self loathing. The verse structure and words chosen work well for this message. It would resonate with those in a similar position. You've hinted at the actual reason for this person's guilty feeling without spelling it out, but I think anyone feeling guilty for any reason would relate to the poem.

I like the feeling that the voices in the head, the negative ones, are loud, but as your title says, the whispers are irrefutable, from God, urging calmness and peace. Finally the softer whispers prove to be more powerful than the shouting voices.

I also like the use of the word 'choice'. Yes, acceptance of the forgiveness is a decision to be made by the individual concerned.

SUGGESTIONS:
1. Genre (already mentioned above)
2. WritingML - Font, size, line-space, center. Maybe italics for the whispers.
3. In the first verse, the fourth line confused me. Is the 'you' looking to change, or has the 'you' already changed (for the worse) and therefore can't change again (for the better)? I couldn't quite understand this.

Thanks for sharing this poem!
- Sonali

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