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Welcome to WDC.

You obviously have some writing experience, but on paper rather than online. You need to leave more spaces when writing on screen. It makes it so much easier to read.

An interesting mix of fantasy and erotica. Bobby the virgin definitely got more than he bargained for. My first thought was that the 'woman' would turn out to be a transvestite. It came as a surprise that she was a witch and could swap genders at will.

One thing to point out, when a new person speaks you start a new paragraph. This would help to deal with my first point about space.

Keep Writing

Sue

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .