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 Love Poem  [18+]
A poem about the expression of God given love
by ForeverDreamer
Review of Love Poem  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hallo!
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Actually, the simplicity of the title intrigued me. It's more generic than usual. The brief description makes it sound like it'll be mostly about the spiritual aspect, but in fact, it's about how the physical leads to various other levels of love.

In two short verses, you've evoked the emotions you associate with love. The words are simple and sincere.

Suggestions:
1. WritingML - font, size, center, italics.
2. The poem does read well as it is, but somehow I wanted a bit more. You've mentioned 'mind' and 'soul' - and described 'body'. What about 'heart', the emotions? Maybe you've mentioned it in passing a couple of times, but I think there could be more emphasis on it.

Thanks for sharing this poem!
- Sonali
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