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I could tell you are a young writer. There is a naivety about your work which I found quite charming.

I noted that your first three paragraphs all start with the word 'Amy'. Might I suggest using 'she' for the second and starting the third with 'Someone was coming up the stairs.'

Your dialogue sounds very natural. I didn't spot any problems with spelling or grammar. The Adventures of Amy Jeakins could make a very good children's book.

Keep Writing

Sue

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