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 Mirror Mirror on the Wall Open in new Window. [E]
Poem about seeing the worst in your reflection.
by Monalisa Vandercox Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hallo!
I saw this on the community newsfeed and thought I'd read it.

I think most people will relate to this poem - we tend to see our flaws when we look in the mirror, because of negative self-image. You've effectively brought out various aspects of this lack of self esteem.

I liked the whole poem, but the best part was the broken slivers showing more instead of less. This shows that ugliness is in the eye of the beholder, since the slivers can no longer reflect the whole image.

The last verse intrigued me.
I wish you had dwelled more on the thought you started out on, there.

SUGGESTIONS:
1. Layout - Maybe you'd like to use WritingML, line font, size, line-space, center and italics.
2. Rhyme scheme - you have rhymes sometimes and don't have them sometimes. I suggest you read it aloud and decide whether you'd like to standardise this. (Sometimes the rhymes came through as a bit forced to me.)

Thanks for sharing this!
- Sonali

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