The title and brief description work for the piece, as does the genre you have chosen. Maybe you'd like to pick two more genres to give the piece more exposure on site.
You've explained the concept of your world and your reasons for going into it quite clearly. I think many people would be able to relate to this piece and the need to unplug for a while. I am responding purely as a reader / writer (not a psychologist or anything, I have no qualification there) - but I think the fact that you can analyse this so clearly and even mention how you can come back to reality with more energy to cope shows that you are a strong person with the ability to know yourself deeply.
I think readers will benefit from your honesty and clarity of expression.
In terms of layout, maybe you'd like to change the font, size and line spacing to make it easier on the eye.
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