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 In bleachers bare Open in new Window. [E]
Amateur hockey players are lucky to find a rink. The bleachers are bare, or are they?
by Kåre เลียม Enga Author Icon
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Hello, Kåre เลียม Enga Author IconMail Icon. This is a review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Open in new Window.! *Smile* I received "In bleachers bare" Open in new Window. via the random 'read & review' button. I have the following comments to offer.

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An old man is playing ice hockey. He is cheered on by ghosts who loved him in the past from the cheap seats in the stands.

*Quill*Commentary

This is my own reading of what you wrote, as it read to me, feel free to disagree with me.

It may look like an empty stand but the old man laying the puck down there is being cheered on by voices that loved him once.

I had to look up the word Bleachers I guess it is an American phrase. This was the key to unlocking the meaning of the poem for me.

Having played in many different kinds of competitive sports I must admit I never paid much attention to the crowd. I was always more interested in my opponent. But I do remember finishing a half marathon once feeling absolutely dead and then I was confronted by all these friends cheering me on to the finish. I snarled at them and then got told off the following day because they had made all this effort to turn up for me. I apologized of course but in the moment it was just about the race.

I guess there are a lot of sports people who really do need the Facebook likes, applause, and medal ceremonies to get them to turn up. I wonder how many of them stick with it once the sound of clapping dies. I guess having a ghostly fan club might help here.


*Quill*Mechanical issues

Technically your Heys need commas to follow them

You are also missing a comma here:

but, for now [,] play on


Thanks for sharing.

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