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 |  | The Solemn Vow  [18+] Some vows can never be broken...  |
 HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hi April, thank you for allowing me to review your poem. Wow! Nicely done. You pulled off the form nicely. An iambic tetrameter can be a bit tricky. I can see why it won The Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest!  This was indeed a period of dark, dark times. The Bubonic plague was so bad that they thought no one would survive. I like these lines below: The Plague of 1656 -- an agent of the River Styx -- ensured the weary bodies’ rot; hence curers’ skills were all for naught. Yet frightly masks adorned their heads while treating patients in their bed; It sums up the plague nicely, and even the horror of the doctor's bird mask. The doctors thought the extended nose would keep the germs away.  Yet frightly masks adorned their headsMaybe consider changing frightly to frightful I don't believe frightly is a word. It were a tranquil, soothing night This is an excellent opening line. It betrays the terror yet to come. I do think were should be was  Her solemn service underway stops when the platform starts to sway and rumbling whispers turn to shrieks as pools of blood the casket leaks Nicely written. Truly creepy! I definitely look forward to reading more of your work. I hope you have many more happy years on WDC!  intuey  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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