Hello Alex Tessler !

Your biographical monologue caught my eye and since I'm looking for folks to review for the Tour de Ports challenge, I decided to read it and give you a review. I hope you find it encouraging and helpful.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

You wrote an emotional allegory based on your own challenges that I enjoyed reading.

You engaged my interest well and kept me reading to the very end.


While I didn't fully understand it all, I felt a great amount of empathy for you and your struggle.


MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

I don't think I have autism but I have also written about living alone in the woods. And sometimes my heroines and heroes have wings too.

It sounds like you've had a very difficult time with people's perceptions of you and dealing with the challenges of autism. My heart goes out to you.

I really admire your bravery in sharing all this about your struggles and challenges.

The ending was an interesting observation and way of looking at things.



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:

In the spirit of helpfulness, I have one little suggestion to make your piece stronger.

In this sentence, I think you have a little typo. I think one word is just missing an apostrophe. Right now it looks like this: "It hurts more because someone told me I was hurting when I'd already learned to tell myself I wasnt." I believe "wasnt" should be "wasn't." So if you decided to make the change, the sentence would then look like this:
"It hurts more because someone told me I was hurting when I'd already learned to tell myself I wasn't." Easy peasy to fix, should you decide to do so.

These are just my opinions and suggestions. Feel free to take what serves you and ignore the rest. I really do mean well and wish you every success.


CONCLUSION:
You wrote a moving biographical monologue piece that I enjoyed reading. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your writing and experiences with the Writing.Com community!


May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler




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