Hi,

Sorry to bother you with a double review, but I just wanted to add something I feel is important.

It would be interesting if you could develop Tory's character some more, dive into his thoughts and show us a little of his past. Why was he driving his motorcycle alone with no particular destination? Does he now regret not having any family who cares about him and realizes he's missing from the world of humans? (And for that matter, does someone notice the abandoned motorcycle and trace it to him?) A theme could arise of one needing to develop connection and community with others to preserve their sense of humanity. And forming Tory more fully will help us root for him as a human being, more than just a pitiful subject of someone's mad science experiment.

Glad to see you're back with the next episode.

This is taking an alarming turn. I'm at the edge of my seat. Your writing is grim and unsettling and leaves me wondering how the central conflict could possibly be resolved in a satisfactory way. It seems as if someone's going to be killed rather unpleasantly if this doesn't stop soon.

Thanks for sharing and keep on writing. It's definitely something I'll want to keep up with



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