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 | Tomorrow  [E] A poem that came to me as I was thinking about what to do after I graduate.  |
| (4.0)| Hello Mindertwenty Happy WDC 23rd Birthday! This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   An inspiring, short poem about realizing we have the power to take control of our destiny. At least in the direction we want it to go. Title and Description -  Theme/Subject Matter:- Great title. It drew me in, curious about the writing. The description made me want to read on. Characters - The main character is the author. It shows the positive outlook he has on life.   Emotion/Impact: - The piece left me inspired. Such a nice, positive emotional impact. My Suggestions - I only have a few minor suggestions. I hope they help. Tomorrow is so far away,But that seems like yesterday. No comma is needed after away.  The hours blur in what seems a minute,I need to slow time down. Try reading this suggestion out loud, and see if you think it helps the flow: The hours blur into what seems a minute. I need to slow down time.  Until today I felt I could reach for the stars,But I’d surely have one by now. No comma is needed after stars.  My Favorite Part: -Until today I felt I could reach for the stars,But I’d surely have one by now. I especially love the part: But I'd surely have one by now. Such a romantic notion. I also really enjoyed the ending: It’s time to take the initiative, To take the reins myself, The future is mine for the taking. Very nice!   Summary:I truly enjoyed your writing. Thank you so much for sharing it with us! KEEP ON WRITING ON! Intuey   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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