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 Obsessions Open in new Window. [13+]
A man decides to act on his feelings towards the woman he's been in love with for years.
by beandon Author Icon
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Review by 👼intuey Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello beandon Author Icon Happy 23rd Birthday! This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" Open in new Window. [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with. *Smile*


*Reading* What? But why? I definitely wasn't expecting that ending. Especially since it seemed like everything was going the way you wanted it to go. She was into you. So why? *Cry*

*Balloon2* Title and Description - The title definitely matches the story, and caught my attention. The description urged me to read on.

*Penr* Theme/Subject Matter:- Well, I don't want to give away the ending, so I won't. But it's about a man obsessed with a woman. He knows the feeling is too intense because he has had them for years. So, he gets up the nerve to finally ask her out.

*Flower1* Characters - The main character is very intense. He questions the sanity of the depth of his emotions over a woman. Feelings that he has had for years.

*Penb*Originality/Creativity:- A very creative, and somewhat disturbing tale.

*Balloon4* Setting - The last scene was written detail by detail. It was easy to visualize while I read. *Shock*

*Flower3*Emotion/Impact: - It left me questioning why. It left me sad, kind of mad, and a lot confused.

*Balloon4* My Suggestions -

*Reading* "we all feel

Capitalize we.

*Penv* nevertheless

Comma after nevertheless

*Books2* how I truly feel.

how I truly felt.

*Reading* I laid out the blanket,

No comma needed

*Bookstack3* and laid with her

and lay with her

*Penb* I had had been planning

*Reading*show her how I truly feel.

to show her how I truly felt.

*Bookstack* In need to.

I need to.

*Peng*Summary: Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us!

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

*Heart* Intuey

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