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| (4.5)| Hello AlthiaStorm  } This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   This was a sweet vignette piece. Even being so short, it was well-written and shared a scene between three people that was easy to visualize. Title and Description - Fitting title. It raised my curiosity to take a peek. The description urged me to read on.Consider adding all three genres to your piece. A lot of people look for items to read based on genre only. It may help pull in more readers.  Theme/Subject Matter:- A cute scene between two parents and their little girl. All three are getting ready for the most important tea party.  Characters - You really did an excellent job letting the reader get an overall impression of all three characters. An amazing feat, especially considering how short the piece is. Nicely done! Originality/Creativity:- A creative scene with excellent toddler speech.   Setting - A festive scene of a happy little family. Emotion/Impact: - This piece left me with a happy, contented feeling from the writer. My Suggestions - The only other minor suggestions I have besides those above are a couple of typos: He slowly creeped his wayHe slowly crept his way  and the man kissedand the men kissed  Summary: Thank you so much for sharing this writing with us. I really enjoyed it. I look forward to visiting your port again, soon. KEEP ON WRITING ON!  Tracey   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/10/2023 @ 4:33pm EDT