Hi, Weirdone-Back in the games , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Girl with Child" , because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "  forum page.

First Impression: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: These are my favorite lines. I like this lines because they cause the reader to stop and think about the plot before continuing to read the poem.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it was about The Hobbit.