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This is what I've become

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This is a very dark poem I wrote back when I was going through a very hard time.
by Underground_Man

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Review of This is what I've become

Review by JACE

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Rated: E

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Hi Underground_Man

.

I'm JACE

, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "This is what I've become"

.

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

Overall Impression. I selected your piece to review precisely because of the subject matter, only from the opposite standpoint. I was unable to help my now ex-wife because of my inability to understand what she was going through. I'm never experienced depression and didn't know how to even begin to help--at least help on my own. We both had to get professional help. That helped us maintain a more even keel until our divorce some 15 years later. We remain friends.

She tried to explain what she felt. Some of your phrases were similar indeed. I know the pain was there but was unable to help.

In your disclaimer you state anyone in this situation should seek professional help. I hope you did.

Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.