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 | You and Me  [E] The little things of marriage.  |
| (4.0)| A WDC Power Review Hi StellaAmbrose . Greetings. I found your offering on the Read & Review section.I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "You and Me" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.  Overall Impression. Yours is a very short free form poem, nicely written. However, may I suggest a couple things to clarify and emphasize what I believe I read?One doesn't have to capitalize the first letter of each line, especially in a free form style. To me as a reader it signifies each line is complete, which I don't believe is your desire. I would place a dash after 'me' and place 'I am loved' on its own line for more emphasis. After all, this is your main point, isn't it?  Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. Discussed above.  My Rating. 4.0.  Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.Reviewed by JACE ** Image ID #1386062 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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