First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the lights not coming on. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The first person point of view and voice are good choices for this story because they reveal the speaker's emotions.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.
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