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 Dear Me Open in new Window. [E]
A letter to myself.
by Mary Ann MCPhedran Author Icon
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Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Good morning, Mary Ann MCPhedran Author Icon. I found this piece in the nRead & Review section.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Dear Me" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I like reading Dear Me letters. It's a great way to learn about a fellow writer--what she wants from her writing, and even from life. Your offering tells a bit of your new journey on WDC and some trouble you experienced. Then you tell us what you hope to do here. I liked both parts.

The first thing I noticed was the format of your letter. I think you have some misplaced carriage returns--some of your paragraphs aren't properly aligned or spaced. Of course, that an easy fix.

May I suggest you remove the opening lines before Dear Me? It distracts the reader and isn't necessary. Also place your word count on a separate line at the end.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* I've found the best method of editing is reading your piece out loud. You'll hear those places that need attention, such as commas for pausing and rewording run-on sentences.    

*Star* My Rating.  4.0.  I hope you continued writing a Dear Me letter to begin each year.

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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