First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with nothing outside the darkness. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like this part because it was a happy ending.
Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story, because they revealed the speaker's personality.
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