Dead city, living river [18+] Dead city, living river |
Greetings sindbad ! This is your seventh (last) day port raid as part of you "A Week of Port Raid Package" from "Magical Express Delivery Wagon" gifted to you by your Secret Valentine. May you'll find this review an inspiring and encouraging one. Without much a do, here are the things I found out after reading your offering: Your language is strikingly vivid. Words like "flickering", "splatter", "ivory mirror roads", and "drenched trees" fire the imagination, painting a powerful picture in the reader's mind. The sensory richness makes the setting visceral. You portray a city not just decaying, but transforming into something fantastical and grotesque. The juxtaposition of "castle of propriety" with "bowels of the arena" creates a society warped by indulgence and corruption. There's a grim allure in this unsettling image. The line between real and surreal dissolves beautifully. "Ferris wheels and daliesque whorehouses" bring a heightened strangeness, echoing the expressive quality of Dali's famous paintings. This pushes the boundaries of conventional cityscapes. Your piece balances decay with vibrancy. "Flickering flames" suggest remnants of life within the urban rot. The imagery of consumption and excretion speaks of an underlying cycle, even within what seems dead. Furthermore, the "electric edges" hint at lingering dynamism amidst the bleakness. It also plays with quiet stillness ("houses of the quiet ones") against frenzied scenes ("animated gardens," "slaughterhouse"). This reflects the multifaceted nature of many urban settings - pockets of tranquility set against chaotic human dramas. Overall, your poem achieves a rare beauty through its focus on unsettling, decaying cityscapes. A sense of haunting wonder emerges through the powerful use of language and the creation of a unique, disturbing atmosphere. Thank you for sharing this! Write on. Best regards, Gervic My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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