Greetings and welcome to Writing.com! An amusing study of a human brain removed from its confines and held up for self-examination. We see a sort of tongue in cheek, pseudo philosophical style as the narrator struggles to focus on the task at hand and instead wanders off into the weeds. I'm not exactly sure what to make of this; if it's nonsense, then you've done a job that could qualify you for iKïyå§ama and her Wonderland project coming up in March. If it's science fiction, you've created a world of disembodied brains running loose; presumably there's a mad scientist named Boltzmann behind it all (I'm sorry, if there's a scientific joke in that name, I'm not familiar with it.) If it's satirical philosophy, it's also nifty, as we contemplate the meaning of conscious existence and realize that perhaps the mindless consideration of such is a distraction from whatever we're supposed to be doing at the moment. I can't think of anything to suggest by way of improvement; your grammar is good, and the absurdity of the described situation is enough to keep us reading. This was fun. Oh, and a silly aside from a music nerd: as I was processing this in preparation for reviewing it, my playlist gave me a song from Imagine Dragons and their unreleased vault: Hole Inside Our Chests. One of the lines goes "and there's my brain - it's on the floor - it's giving lovers all a brain tour!" Absurd, yes. Somehow the vibe feels similar to what you wrote Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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