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 For Granted Open in new Window. [E]
taking life for granted can stop two people from reconciling their differences.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

What a heartfelt and beautiful poem. I love everything about it: the flow is good, the feelings are simply expressed and sincere, and your rhymes work well without being trite.

I apologize in advance because I'm on mobile and can't tell if you've already utilized this, but I always recommend using size 4 Verdana font for easy readability across devices. And poetry usually looks more elegant when the text is centered.

I don't usually have much to criticize about poetry because I view it as a highly subjective art form; meters and syllable counts don't matter to me as much as someone pouring their heart into their work, and you've clearly done that.

I like how you gradually unfold the dynamics of the relationship throughout the verses: at first we assume it's a significant other, then perhaps a best friend, then possibly a mother (though you do say you both "grew up") and at the end we see it's your brother.

It ends with a sense of relief that you were able to make things right before he passed away, and reminds us all to take care of our family relationships.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *HeartG*


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