This is a wild premise having a pen that can grant wishes. It don't blame the main character for trying to use it to fill his fantasies. I think this story would definitely appeal to the audience it was created for i.e. diaper fans. You capture the experience of regressing to being a baby very well. I think the only thing missing in this scenario is that the main character is by himself throughout the experience. It might be more fun to have other other characters there to witness and react to him regressing. Maybe something that you might use in another story.



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