Jots and Tittles and other Random Things [13+] Just things that I think about now and then. |
Greetings, ajar627. I'm Jace, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering, specifically "Week 27 - Apples" for the "~ The Poet's Place Cafe~" group. Form. The form is Cinqku, which has a form of five lines with 2 syllables, 3 syllables, 4 syllables, 6 syllables and 2 syllables with a twist in the final one or two lines. Overall Impression. Ah, the promise of Spring. Your poem signifies rebirth--the ending of winter. The poem follows the correct form with one exception, in my opinion--the twist. I feel that the final two lines support the rest of the poem in a routine manner and does not represent a twist. Technical or Editorial Considerations. I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your poem. I have nothing to add in this section. Rating. 4.0. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinions. Reviewed by JACE My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" . My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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