The Inner Character of a Person [E] What truly lies within ones heart. |
Greetings, TheBusmanPoet . I'm Jace, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "The Inner Character of a Person" for the "~ The Poet's Place Cafe~" group. Form. Yours is a free form poem. I'm taking the moment to pass on a few comments on your offering in particular, that I found on the Read & Review feature. I'm not particularly good with reviewing free form poems; thus, I'm forcing myself beyond my comfort zone. Overall Impression. Your words should resonate to anyone who purports to be a good person. Today's society seems to show goodness in decreasing quantities. Though short, I find reading your poem peaceful. I admit I don't understand some of the punctuation you used. Please explain I'll address that below. Technical or Editorial Considerations. I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your poem. Why did you place a semi-colon after heart? It felt like the end of a sentence. Since your poem has no set form (that I could determine), why not place 'And' to start your third line. As a reader, I found it a bit distracting. An apostrophe is needed to reflect possession. ... person's character ... Rating. 4.5. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinions. Reviewed by JACE My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" . My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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