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 God Complex Open in new Window. [E]
Abstract Nonsense
by Joullanar Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Well… since you call this “nonsense,” I am unsure how exactly to approach it. I see a person exploring basic concepts of existence and the dilemma of being. The phrase “God complex” implies a person suffering from narcissistic personality disorder, but I don’t really see that here. Towards the end it does begin to imply a sort of aloofness and feeling different from others, but this could easily be someone simply thinking peculiar thoughts in a quiet moment.

Formatting tips:
~ using size 4 Verdana font ensures readability across devices
~ including a line count is always required when entering contests
~ Otherwise it looks good.

In line 7 I’m not sure about the word “instaur;” do you mean “install?” The rhyme and rhythm flow well and are easy to read. I don’t usually have much to criticize about poetry, especially free verse. As long as it reads ok and is written with sincerity and art, it doesn’t matter how the lines scan or how many syllables there are per line. Also, I’m too lazy to write formal poetry myself, so I wouldn’t know how to begin poking at anyone else’s *Laugh*

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