I liked your take on divinity. I'm of the same opinion that God isn't necessarily embodied by the Western Christian ideal of a grandfatherly white man in white robes, but rather can take any number of forms depending on to whom he's revealing himself. I also like the idea of trying to show that God is embodied in simple, everyday interactions.

Some added detail and development of the scene would really help to show what a special moment this is. While the scene is set effectively as it currently exists, it reads a little more like a quick vignette than a deeper story, and I think your initial premise (of God being in the people we love) would be more effectively illustrated with a bit more information about the nature of the relationship between the two individuals in the anecdote.

This was a thought-provoking item that was well-written. Nice work!