Grandma Hears a Joke [E] Grandma eavesdrops with comical consequences. |
Hello Bikerider Congratulations on your Writing.com account anniversary this month! I'm sending this review in honor of the occasion, courtesy of the "Anniversary Reviews" activity. Positives This was a delightful story that managed to fit a ton of detail, description, and humor into only a few short words. I like the fact that the story started with Grandma hearing the joke and then devolved from there. It was a really effective choice in such a short piece to start things right off the bat. Suggestions My only (small) quibbles with the piece are that the reader never really gets a sense of what the joke was that Grandma laugh so much, and at the very end the story finishing with Grandpa's point of view felt like a bit of a deviation from what was otherwise Grandma's narrative for the rest of the story. Overall Overall, I thought this was a really fun, entertaining flash fiction story that has all of your usual humor and excellent technique. Nicely done! I hope you've found this review helpful. If so, please consider paying it forward by reviewing the work of another WDC author! Respectfully, Jeff "Rating & Reviewing Philosophy" My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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