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 Grandma Hears a Joke Open in new Window. [E]
Grandma eavesdrops with comical consequences.
by Bikerider Author Icon
Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Bikerider

Congratulations on your Writing.com account anniversary this month! I'm sending this review in honor of the occasion, courtesy of the "Anniversary ReviewsOpen in new Window. activity.


*Penw* Positives

This was a delightful story that managed to fit a ton of detail, description, and humor into only a few short words. I like the fact that the story started with Grandma hearing the joke and then devolved from there. It was a really effective choice in such a short piece to start things right off the bat.


*Penw* Suggestions

My only (small) quibbles with the piece are that the reader never really gets a sense of what the joke was that Grandma laugh so much, and at the very end the story finishing with Grandpa's point of view felt like a bit of a deviation from what was otherwise Grandma's narrative for the rest of the story.


*Penw* Overall

Overall, I thought this was a really fun, entertaining flash fiction story that has all of your usual humor and excellent technique. Nicely done!


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