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Review #4736536
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 Spring Open in new Window. [ASR]
A haiku about Spring.
by Sophy New Year Author Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

This poem deal with nature, specifically spring.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the visual and how it put me in the moment.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a haiku. A haiku is a short form of Japanese poetry, traditionally with 3 lines, and a 5,7,5 syllable pattern. The poem here matches traditional form.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "A cardinal pair" - It was descriptive enough to picture two red birds on an early spring tree branch with green buds just popping out.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The haiku also had a challenge - not to use the letter "E." Very good job writing a visual without that letter! The haiku did a great job capturing the following elements; simplicity, directness of expression and intensity. Well done!


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