%%USERNAME%%    %%ACCWORDS%% %%ONOFF%% |
 Review #4737007 |
 | Feminism  [E] Short poem about sisterhood and being proud of ourselves and other women for standing up.  |
| (4.0)| Hi Mandy Writes  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  I am reviewing your poem, "Feminism" , in affiliation with "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" .Please remember that these opinions are purely my own, and any advice given is done so with the sole intention of being helpful.  What I liked: The title drew me to this poem when I peeked into your portfolio. I was interested to read your thoughts on feminism. And then, the first paragraph appeared, and I absolutely loved it. Saying you don't walk around wearing your uterus like a hat made me smile. What a great way to say you don't go around shouting your opinions and trying to force them onto others. you're not edgy about the topic. But, you add, you are proud to be a woman. I feel exactly the same way. I love being a woman, and I am proud of who I am, but I don't try to force it on others. I like how you discuss feminism at different time periods. First, you mention people of your mother's generation who lit the feminism fie and acted to make people listen and to give them a chance to become equals with men. To those women, we owe a huge debt. You speak of pride for your daughters, who stand with us, a little taller, maybe, continuing the work that women before them have done. And, lastly, you are proud of yourself for believing in yourself. I love those final two lines: "for finally believing / that we ALL deserve better." I love that! I couldn't agree more. Suggestions: I love how you link all the groups and generations of women and show your readers how everyone plays their part. I wasn't sure about the third verse, though. I didn't understand what you meant by saying your are proud pf your sisters, "for leaving normal / in the dust." I wondered if "leaving" is maybe a typo, and it should be "living"? Although, it still doesn't really make sense to me. I would take a look at that part if you were to revise this. Parting Comments: This is a really great poem that speaks to me, as a woman. I really like the self car and self love you show through your words. That good to read. I have enjoyed reading and reviewing your poem. Happy anniversary! Choconut
|
|||
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
My review has been submitted for consideration in "
You have not yet responded to this review.