This would be better formatted in a book format rather than separate items that are linked as chapters it is for the ease of review let's and readers this way of formatting depends an awful.lot on the back button to get the whole story. It is also easier to write in a book format because it allows for easier outlining and editing individual chapter while keeping it easy to see an overview of the story. The summary of the story could be a little tighter. Giving more of the feeling and energy of the story. You shouldn't judge a book by it's cover but you better bet people are going to judge it and decide to read it based on the summary. It needs more action words and showing than the simple third grade book report description. You are trying to entice or seduce readers with your blurb. It is the first and sometimes only chance to hook your reader into reading what you wrote.

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