Name of Poem: Mystic Eyes
Name of Author: JMW

Hello, I found your poem through the Browse by Genre under Mysteries. I enjoyed reading it, and I hope you find this feedback useful.

Message/Theme: The author is being jilted by someone he is attracted to. His thoughts are directed more to himself. Good word choice delivers the meaning effectively.

Narrative/Style: The narrative is a small poem that tells how someone across the room is teasing him, and he views her presence as a blessing at first and, later, a curse.

Form/flow: The form is sestet.
The flow follows the author's thoughts.

Tone: The author's attitude is soft and wishful at first by the person across the room and, after continuous teasing, becomes hardened.

Mood: the mood makes the reader feel both sorrow and anger.

Imagery/Pace: The imagery is vivid with figurative language.
The pace is smooth.

My Favorite Line:

Your mystic eyes—like fireflies—float through the room like blessings.

I like the sound, the analogy, and the simile to portray it.

I thought it was well written and read smoothly. I saw no issues with spelling or punctuation, so I cannot offer any suggestions for change.

Write On!

Kristina

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